Moment in time writing number 2

I was getting ready to jump into my worst
nightmare the hill of leaves. It was big in fact
it was bigger than big it was huge. Three Two
One go my parents said as I start to run to the
ramp. I saw leaves go everywhere. I felt the hard
crunchy leaves on my soft skin. On the inside I
felt like I was jumping off the sky tower. Then
when I hit the ground I heard a crack no split even.
It was my arm I broke my arm

The end

This is my moment in time writing that focus on part of

a story. I used show not tell to make my writing interesting.

Moment In Time Writing About A Goat

One afternoon after a long day of school I went to zaks house. Me and zak
went to the tramp and there was a huge goat getting ready to ram
the fence and before I nyow it I heard the bang of the fence as it went
to the hard and solid ground and the goat was out. Me and zak got of
the tramp but I was scared Very scared but then the goat ran passed
me and I could feel the wind from the goat onto me legs and as that
happened I could small the goat. Then zak went to his mum and
said the goat is out again. And then saw zaks mum put it back in it pen.